OKAY! Here we go again. Review Responses for CHAPTER 14!! I know, I know, it's LOONG overdue. But here you go! FINALLY!!!! (these are for "Accidentally In Love:Misunderstood")
Eris: What a pretty penname. Eris, as in the Greek goddess of Chaos? Oh, yes, and WELCOME to my little reviewers' party! Or were you already a part of it? (I'm beginning to lose track. In fact, a moment ago I misplaced my shoes... they're still missing, come to think of it... and my mind. Have you seen it? haha). Yes, Jack went all the way through sophomore year without learning basic-basic reading. I actually did research about how many people, mainly adults, haven't learned to read (in other words, I asked my World Studies teacher). And there are like MILLIONS of American adults that don't know how to read. There are all these polls and studies, and my teacher showed me some charts, and I was just... daunted. That's what gave me the initial idea for Jack. I needed something to make him unique, a reason my readers could pity my big bullying character, and then my teacher mentioned all these things having to do with reading one day in class, and it just came to me (an epiphany! So that's what one of those feels like!). I know a boy in New York that can't read--but then, he dropped out of school in freshman year of high school. Jack dropped out in the middle of... was it junior year or his sophomore year? Huh, me being the author, you'd think I'd know this... Anyway, thanks for your support!
Water Block: WELCOME to my little reviewers' party! YOU REVIEWED EVERY CHAPTER! When I saw that it almost moved me to tears. That may also have been because I was in such a bad mood the day I recieved all those reviews, and seeing them just cheered me right up. As you can tell, your encouragment means so much to me! Thank you!
EraseTheMemories: Are you new to my reviewers' party? If so, WELCOME! Thanks so much for joining us this wonderful, wonderful morning (or whatever time you're reading this). I'm glad you could enjoy my story. Which character is your favorite and why? (Of course you're not obligated to answer, I'm simply asking because I don't like to write a Review Response that is only 2 lines long unless it's absolutely unavoidable or I'm just too lazy one day). Um... I can't think of anything else to say at the moment. Thanks so much for reading! Your support means everything to me.
Chezzles.ze.Great: You laughed! Haha, and here I was wondering if I was the only person who'd find it funny. But then I'm used to being the only one laughing at my own jokes (chuckles). How are you? Are you on summer break yet? What's everyone doing for summer break? And WHY AM I AWAKE THIS EARLY? Perhaps because of the thunderstorm outside... I dislike thunderstorms. I know they're necessary, which is why I won't say I HATE them, but... it's an irrational fear, I suppose. Anyway, hope to hear from you again soon!
Marie: Yay! Jack's learning to read! How are you? It feels like it's been a while since I haven't been doing these Review Responses. But I missed chatting with my reviewers so much! So I had to do this. Summer break is coming up for you, right? What're you planning to do?
Itse: Hey, my partner in crime! (haha, get it? since I'm your beta for a MYSTERY novel?) I can't believe you're still reading this! Anyway, I'm currently working on your chapter 3 still! (LOOKIT me go! I'm so motivated right now I could cry).
Staci: WELCOME to my little reviewers’ party! Don’t worry about what you say in a review to me; I appreciate all and any feedback, whether it’s about the story or how my writing has affected someone, or even if you just want to rant about your day/week/whatever. I get bored, and love to read other peoples’ thoughts—they’re like miniature autobiographies. Your comments especially meant a lot to me. I’m sorry to hear about your family if they’re anything like Jack’s, as I imagine it must be unpleasant for you. I had a grandparent that gave my dad a lot of grief in his childhood—maybe another reason he’s raised me more like a drill sergeant than a father. Subconsciously, maybe my grandpa is whom I based Jack’s dad off of—The man died long before I was born, but I’d hear stories and my dad has scars that the Military can’t explain away. Jack’s brothers are like my sisters (both elder), only a tad more violent. Strange how I’m only realizing all this just now (I’m in a very philosophical mood tonight, so I guess you’re in for it, haha). Anyway, I was tempted to make Elizabeth all perfect, but I don’t know anyone all perfect, so she is how she is. I like how she doesn’t so much change throughout the story as just kind of comes out of her shell, because all along she’s been this great person, although her appearance isn’t at all stunning, and yet the entire story is almost from Jack’s POV, so it’s like he’s really watching her true personality emerge. And then there’s Jack, who isn’t so bad at heart… Ha, wow. Can you tell I’m arrogant? Thanks so much for your review. I’m glad to hear someone can honestly relate to my characters, although it’s unfortunate the character one may relate to has such a horrible family.
Criti-sized: I was beginning to wonder when I’d be hearing from you again. Glad you’re back! And I LOVE that you despise Kiba. I just finished writing the last chapter of this story (although not every chapter has been posted yet), and I realized that Kiba really is a terrible antagonist. He irritates me, and as tempted as I am to delete his very existence, I find that I can’t, because then I wouldn’t have a story nor an ending. It’s funny how you worded that—“It had me so annoyed that I gave up reading that chapter for a second…” Because that’s exactly how I felt writing that chapter. I kept distracting myself, stopping in the middle of a paragraph to go get a glass of water or something, and it was just torture to finish. I’ve decided that’s the last time we’ll be reading from Kiba’s POV—I’m done pitying him, Chapter 12 was just kind of his break from antagonism. By writing from his POV at all, I guess I was trying to tempt from my readers a sense that Kiba wasn’t all villain. But I suppose he is, lol. Just to defend my reviewers, I must say that I doubt they’re jumping around about it. I’d like to imagine they’re as fed-up with Kiba as you and I. This chapter proves your exploration theory about Jack and Liz’s connection. As for Jack himself, another reason he kind of gave up on reading until Susannah came along is that I imagine the humiliation must be very potent. How do you ask someone to teach you to read, when you’re eighteen years old and can’t even write your alphabet? Kindergartners in the United States learn to write their alphabet, they learn to read basic words and names if they hadn’t already learned at home—but Jack can’t do any of that. He can perfectly mimic the alphabet and memorize the words being read to him, but he can’t himself actually read. Jack couldn’t possibly ask someone his age or older to teach him; that’d take away too much of Jack’s dignity when he already has so little. So Jack pretty much lets it go, finds a way around reading and writing to get by. But Susannah is barely out of kindergarten, and she’s a slow reader, which basically puts her on the same level as Jack. It’s hard to make a fool of yourself in front of a child, because a child as young as Susannah hasn’t yet been corrupted by pride or disdain… Gosh that was fun. I feel like a GENIUS! Lol. Thanks for giving me the opportunity to explain myself—always makes me feel better. Sorry for making you suffer through this entire nonsensical Response. Your comments are obviously very appreciated, though.
InspiredSpider: I’m writing a story for my cousins, and so far there’s a tarantula named Frederico in it. Looking back on your gracious, if not slightly eccentric reviews, I wonder if I’ve based the main character (not Frederico, but his human best friend) on you. Subconsciously, of course. I usually don’t discover connections between my characters and the people they’re based off of until I’m in a really psychological, philosophical move such as now. Lol. And your review WAS short! WHAT IS WRONG WITH THE WORLD? I didn’t know art exams COULD be EIGHT HOURS long. Wouldn’t you, like, die of boredom? I shouldn’t say that, because if you died I’d be absolutely dismal that no amount of chocolate ice cream with gummy bears on top, and cinnamon hard candies, could cure… Madre de Dios, I’m hungry. Someone is crying on the radio, a man… it’s making me sad. If it was a girl then I’d be used to it, but I hate when men cry. Especially at weddings. Last week I was at my friend’s wedding in Chicago (name: Justin, age: 22, wife’s name: Amanda, her age: 19—WHY get married at 19 and 22, I ask you?), and I was standing next to Justin’s friend Matt, who is a total hardass, and he started getting all teary. I was uncomfortable. When I asked him what was wrong he said he was just so happy that baseball season had started again. I started inching away and avoided him the rest of the night. Anyway, the guy crying on the radio has stopped now so it’s all good. How did PINK end up being the meaning of life? I would’ve voted for GREEN. You know what’s kind of odd? Other than you and me? Dr. Seuss (why is he CALLED a DOCTOR, anyway?) comes up in Chapter… I don’t know, I think it’s Chapter 18? Someone mentioned Shakespeare in a review for this story awhile ago and that’s in Chapter 18 (?) too. I wrote those chapters WAY before anyone mentioned Shakespeare or Dr. Seuss. STOP FORESEEING THE FUTURE, PEOPLE! Creeps me out… Who am I kidding? NOTHING creeps me out. I AM FEARLESS! (except when it comes to thunderstorms, then I’m a total coward). You know what they say about people who say “crazy” six times in one long, rambling paragraph? They say those people grow up to be psychologists. LMAO! I’M HILARIOUS! Anyway, I hope to hear from you again soon. You always cheer me up. Thanks! (Oooh, good song is on! “Pencil Fight” by Apartment 28 (or was it Apt. 23?)). I hope your Myspace begins working again (mine broke down last weak but started working again just the other day), otherwise I’ll look forward to hearing from you sometime before Christmas.
SitaTheLastVampire: WELCOME to my little reviewers’ party! What’s your first language? Mine’s English, but I can speak fluent Italian if forced—don’t ask me to write it, though, because I can barely spell in English let alone anything else. What you’re reading now has been closely edited by at least 24 beta readers (editors) plus an FBI agent. Friends have taught me some Spanish, and I spent four months living on an army base in Spain, so I should be fluent in Spanish as well, but I’m really not. French I can’t spell nor pronounce, but I can understand it. That’s how I am with most languages—I can understand it when hearing or reading it, but I can’t speak or spell it even if my life depended on it. Sorry, I’m just rambling now. Although I must say, for someone who claims they don’t use words very well, you write very intelligently. I’m very happy to hear you were able to fall in love with my characters. That tells me they’re realistic enough to be believable. Jack and Elizabeth are fun, both so ignorant in matters of vanity and love (I believe that’s what you meant). I’m very glad you appreciate my story, and I’m doubly grateful for your comments. It’s always fun to hear how great I am (haha, kidding, kidding). To answer your question, I don’t plan on writing a chapter from Katrina’s POV. In fact, I didn’t even consider it. But great suggestion—if I hadn’t just finished writing this story (don’t worry, the rest of the chapters haven’t been posted yet), I would’ve found it just as interesting to write from Katrina’s POV. You’re right, though, Katrina isn’t all that bad a person. Her reasons will be revealed by Elizabeth in Chapter23, and then more thoroughly resolved in Chapter 25. (WOW! 25 chapters! That’s more than I’ve ever written for ANY story!). Your review did indeed make me smile. Thanks so much for the encouragement! Always appreciated. :)
Mystery: Well there you are! It was one of your reviews that reminded me I had yet to update this story, and after reading it I felt so terrible about neglecting my author duties. (haha, author duties). Fortunately, it would appear you’ve forgiven me. I tried to update this as quickly as I could, but Father Dearest has me on punishment (again), for perhaps the rest of my life (I won’t go into the details of why). No hard feelings? Thanks for your continuing support!
Nacomis: I MISSED YOU! Where have you been? I didn’t hear from you for at least 3 chapters and I was becoming worried that your very existence had evaporated, which made me very depressed indeed. Hey, you remember my story “You Can Be (My Bodyguard)”? WELL I WROTE A SEQUEL FOR IT! Did I mentioned that already? Well, I forget. Anyway, the reason I’m mentioning it (again) is that I’m just putting the finishing touches on it, which means it’ll be ready to be posted soon! Of course I have to finish THIS story, as well as “Drama King” and the other three, but “Drama King” is quickly coming to a close, and I’m thinking of removing “Life Will Let You” until I’ve come up with a way to gracefully complete it (I’ve got severe writer’s block on that one). In not so many words, I was thinking of removing “Life Will Let You” in favor of my sequel to “You Can Be My Bodyguard.” I’ve also began a sequel to “Age of Ice.” Only the first chapter and part of a second, but I have a general idea of where I want to go with that particular plot. I thought I’d mention all this to you seeing as you’ve reviewed just about ALL of my stories (I think…?), and you seemed to especially like “Bodyguard.” … Yeah. Exciting, huh? Anyway, I know how mothers can be so I’ll just end this gracelessly with the usual: THANKS for reviewing! As always, it’s appreciated.
Minute-glass: I don’t know what song is on the radio now, but I like it. Anyway, someone agrees with me! Yay! Always a good thing… (well, once in a while can’t hurt). I’m glad you can appreciate my sense of humor, and the melodrama. Oh god, my neighbor owns a Harley and it’s 11:07pm, yet he feels the urge to go outside and rev his engine a couple times. Weird guy. I call him Cueball, although I forget entirely why. He bald and fat, and the father of one of my dad’s friends. Sorry, rambling again. Thanks so much for your continuing encouragement!
Gemini01: Well I’m honored! Thanks so much for saying so. I’ve noticed you’re a fan to quite a lot of successful stories, so do you mind if I use you as a good luck charm?
Anne1822: Also WELCOME to my little reviewers’ party! Glad you’ve been enjoying. Thanks so much for your encouragement!
Justcallmebubba: lol, You’re exactly right about Jack. Only if he was an actual M&M, I’d probably opt to eat him instead of a hug. Your hopes may be answered in the next chapter… or was it the next chapter? Or the next after that? Haha, I know, it’s torture, isn’t it? I was just watching the new “Pride and Prejudice” directed by Joe Wright, and oh my GOD, would Darcy and Elizabeth EVER kiss? They came SO CLOSE at least 3 TIMES! But it was so worth it. (Is that supposed to be a metaphor, you wonder? A hint? (cue maniacal laughter)). Thanks so much for the review! As always, it’s appreciated.
TricksterGoddess: haha. Yes, I just updated these 3 chapters. I know, it’s kind of screwy how we jump right from the start of the party to the end of it, but I’m not good at writing party scenes. I suppose that’s another reason I wrote Chapter12 from Kiba’s POV—it was quick and mostly painless (well, except for Katrina, who’s fictional anyway so I won’t dwell on it). I'm so glad you're enjoying!
Vitreous: I know, I know, but don't kill me quite yet. It's ALL part of a BIGGER plan. And isn't Suzie just SO darling? I love her, really I do. She shows up a couple more times in chapters to come. She's modeled after my cousin Ariella, who's now 13, but as sweet as she is now, she was even sweeter at 7... (is "sweeter" even proper grammar?). Thanks for your continuing support!
Yu Nyugen: Haha, yep! I just felt so bad for taking SO VERY long to update. Usually I try to keep it to a schedule (Dad's influence). This story is supposed to be updated 1 chapter every week, but now it's turning into 3 chapters every 2 weeks. I dunno, I'm trying to stick to the schedule, but this new one may work even better for me. Anyway, THANKS for your review!
Glittericious: YAY! THERE YOU ARE! I thought you'd disappeared off the face of the earth or something just as terrible. Now that you're back, I'm overjoyed that my story could make you smile. Happy reading! Thanks for your continuing support!
Iced-Faerie: The picture in my head was SO great when I was writing that part. I laughed for like 2 straight minutes... which creeped out the two kids I was babysitting at the time. Glad you're enjoying! Thanks so much.
Katemary77: Lookit that, lol. ALL exclaimation points! (I think I spelt that wrong). Thanks so much. I'm so happy to see that you're so excited!
c2heart1420: Isn't Suzie ABSOLUTELY darling? She really is going to grow into a heartbreaker, that one. I love her. And while I was proofreading this chapter, I was all smiles--I love manipulating Jack... Is that bad? (lol). Thanks for your encouragment! Means the world and more to me.
Rae-07: My life is fabulous! I'm in Montana for the week to visit old friends, as well as to browse around University of Montana in Missoula. It's so pretty here! I love Montana. I lived here for a couple months when I was 9 (and again when I was 14) and it's always had a place in my heart. The only problem is now that I'm here, my friends are trying to set me up with a new friend they've made since I've been gone (I DISLIKE REAL-LIFE MATCHMAKERS!)... I LOVE coincidences! (I don't think I spelled it right either). Especially when they have to do with real people meeting real people whose physical appearance resembles one of my fictional characters. It's just... I don't know. To me, it makes them sound like they could be real, and I like seeing that I can write something... well, not real, but slightly believable perhaps. Soon enough it's going to get a bit outrageous though. Thanks for sharing your coincidence experience with me! Loved hearing it! And as always, your continuing support is appreciated.
theGhostQueendelosPlatanos: It took me a minute to spell your penname right. WELCOME to my little reviewers' party! I'm so happy to hear you could find it humorous, Jack and Kiba at the tiny table. Just thinking about it still makes me laugh, and Jack has such an ironic way of saying things... at least in my head. (Is that strange? well, even so, we already knew I'm crazy). Thanks so much for the encouragment!
OnTheOutsideLookingIn: I've just realized that in at least 2 of my stories, I have these pint-sized mediators. Children that act as go-betweens, between the 2 arch-nemeses (plural). And as for cliches, I just can't HELP myself! Cliches are so fun to manipulate, and I love reading other peoples' cliched stories because every one has a different way of writing it. They have their own characters with their own personalities, their own individual plots. We all know this and that person is going to end up together eventually, or turn into a tragic Romeo and Juliet in some cases; but it's getting there that's half the fun. And I get so attached to my little cliches. Glad we're seeing eye-to-eye! Thanks so much for your review... Did I completely forget to WELCOME you? I think I did (but anyway, it's just kind of my little trademark for Review Responses, as well as to make you feel more comfortable with the interaction), WELCOME to my little reviewers' party!
Lena Niccolas: Your penname is beautiful! Thank you for reviewing, your support means the world over to me. WELCOME to my little reviewers' party!
CynicalValentine98: Suzie IS adorable! Everyone's approving of her, though for a moment I was afraid all of Jack's fans might attack her. But with her adorable-ness, the crisis has been averted... diverted... aborted? (I'm stuck on Thesaurus-mode). And YAY Elizabeth! Here I do pity Katrina--since I've finished writing this (although I haven't completed posting the new chapters, don't worry), I've written things that somewhat make Katrina less of a villain... (WHAT'S THAT? DID I JUST GIVE AWAY A (big hint)??? (cue maniacal laughter)). Haha, fan-freaking--(what was I saying? lol) indeed. Bordered on squealing, aye? You'll probably be screeching a different tune once you see the first chapter (which is actually a prologue)... (another BIG hint). Which reminds me, I should go post that now. It HAS been 3 weeks since I promised, and since I've finished writing this story I really do have time... Yes, I think I'll go do that. Hope to hear from you there! And thanks so much for your support here! I couldn't have kept going without you.
Green Eyes: WELCOME to my little reviewers' party! I'm glad you're enjoying. Look! Green eyes like Jack's eyes! Yay! (although that's probably not how you intended it, but I'm fabulous at misunderstanding things in my own favor). Thanks so much for your review! I loved hearing from you.
Atiya: YAY! It's you! And indeed he DID learn how to read! (jumps up and down with way too much caffeine in her system). Thanks for your review!
One Desire: Speaking of brilliant--UPDATE "Ubiquitous"!
G: haha, I didn't even look at it that way ("Jack can still intimidate on playschools"). But you're right! And, AHH! You're reading my mind! I was just thinking "Jack's like a big teddy bear..." Now if only he was real! (lol)
AnotherDreamer: WELCOME to my little reviewers' party! Glad you're enjoying. Thanks for dropping me a line! Loved hearing from you.
Ginne: haha, Glad you approve! Thanks so much.
FalseXxThrills: I love your penname. WELCOME to my little reviewers' party! I'm so happy to hear you're enjoying. I live/aim to please. Thank you!
FamousOneLiners: Too cute is right! And to think I was worried Jack's fans would attack little Suzie for making a move on their man, lol.
Nightfirefeather: Your penname makes me think of an action movie... I don't know which movie or why. (My mind is a terribly odd place). Very pretty, still. Anyway, WELCOME to my little reviewers' party! So many new readers/reviewers! I'm a tad startled, actually. I had no idea any story I wrote could be so popular. Thanks for your encouragment!
Whacked: lol, Sneaky is my middle name. (Actually, it's much worse. You wouldn't believe me if I told you, and I won't tell you, so don't ask (lol)). I've done that before, though--I'll be waiting for someone to update, and then once I won't check for a week, and when I finally do drop by the website, POOF! It's, like, finished, and I'm, like, "WHAT?" lol (if I pause to say "like" descriptively one more time, you're allowed to shoot me). Kiba made me laugh in this chapter, while writing that part. It always takes Jack to warn him at least 3 times before Kiba shuts up. Another example of how Kiba's kind of on the slow side himself. YES! GO ME! haha, THANK you so much! Your continuing support really is all that keeps me updating. :)
Mrdarcylover: I UPDATED! Unfortunately, it wasn't as soon as you or I had hoped. But at least I updated! And 3 chapters within 5 hours! That's got to be a record somewhere, lol.
Grave At.tention: Have you checked out Chapter 17? And in Chapter 20... oh wait, I haven't posted that one yet. Can't tell you what'll happen there (don't want to completely ruin it). Thanks for reviewing! I always love hearing from you. :)
WickedMe: WELCOME to my little reviewers' party! I'm overjoyed to see you're enjoying... (I don't think that sentence was grammatically correct, but oh well). I'm updating as fast as I can!
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And that concludes Chapter 14's Review Responses. THANKS for reading! I LOVE YOU ALL SO MUCH!
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I'm going to start right off because, yeah, I really have nothing else to put on this blog. I moved these here because the Review Responses just got SO LONG! If you're reading this and don't recognize any of these pennames, well, that's because these are only for people that reviewed Chapter 2 to my story "Accidentally In Love:Misunderstood" on my FictionPress account: http://www.fictionpress.com/~eclipsiasoulbird. Go read it!
Mystery: Lookit how fast I updated! Aren’t you proud of me? Lately it’s been taking me MONTHS to update just ONE CHAPTER of ANY of my stories, but LOOK AT THIS! I was so impressed by everyone’s unanimous support. I really expected someone to be like “you’ve got 5 unfinished stories, GO FINISH THOSE BEFORE YOU START SOMETHING ELSE!” Do you have an account on FictionPress, my anonymous friend? I’d love to read anything you write, even if you’d just like to email me something that I could proofread—of course, I suck at proofreading, as you can clearly tell if you look closely at any of my stories (but especially my old/completed ones (cringes) those are REALLY horrible), so really I’ll just be reading it and then replying with an email full of either praise or criticism, or both, lol. Either way, I must do SOMETHING to repay you this wonderful service you’ve done me, just by taking the time to type out a few encouraging words!
Harmonized: IT’S YOU!!! HOW I’VE MISSED YOU! Haven’t you been with me since “Age of Ice”? Wasn’t that like, YEARS ago? It feels like it, doesn’t it? Your reviews made me grin so big, you don’t even know how happy you’ve made me just by showing up. And look—I’ve put the little tab at the top just like you suggested. And you’re so right—I’m glad I didn’t recount the whole thing, either. Truth be told, I started to, but then I was looking it over and fell asleep, and that’s when I realized I would have to rewrite the 2nd chapter, and I’m very glad I did, and I’m VERY glad you noticed. Of course I HAD to make everyone love Jack, because before I started writing this story and was just coming up with the character analyses I had already fallen for him. Unsurprisingly, you were almost head-on with your stereotype of Jack. In the original draft of this 3rd chapter, Jack DID live alone and his parents were dead, he was an only child, yada yada yada, but then I wrote myself into a corner with that and decided I needed something else, so I gave him a very dysfunctional family because you can do almost anything with a family like Jack’s when you’re the author—it’s impossible to write yourself into a corner with Jack’s type of family. If things get slow, I could make something happen between Jack and his brothers, or Jack and his father, you see? Sorry, I get sidetracked explaining myself because I just feel so clever and I’m just so arrogant. And my head only inflates with the knowledge I’m on your Favorites List—I always feel like I’ve won some sort of prize when one of my stories shows up on someone’s Fav. Stories list. And, by the way, OH MY GOD! You actually put “Age of Ice” in your bio? Ack!! You didn’t think that story was absolutely HORRIBLE? I did, and I wrote it. I cringe to look back on it. I’ve already written sequels for “You Can Be My Bodyguard” and “Let’s Just Pretend” that I’m just waiting to post until I finish things with this and “Drama King” , but “Age of Ice” isn’t going anywhere. How could you STAND it? Maybe that’s just because it was the first story I posted and I had just started writing stories, so I was in dire need of improvement anyway, but… (looks back on it and cringes). Still, THANK YOU. I know my being in your bio is probably what attracted some other readers to my stories, and I can really never thank you enough. Speaking of all these stories, though, when are you going to update yours?! I do have at least one of YOUR stories on MY Favorite Stories list! … Wow, this got long. But then, hasn’t it been so long since we’ve had a nice little chat like this?
One Desire: My other favorite reviewer!!! That’s good to hear about LJ—I’m never even near that site because I just keep forgetting about it. I forget about MySpace too. Speaking of which, I should really go and find a computer to answer those friend requests… hm. My Goal for today then. Anyway, what sports do you play? I used to be really into soccer, and then football, and then, well… art. I don’t think art counts as a sport, but it could get PRETTY intense in my angst-y little art class at my old school, I’m telling you, so maybe. These Arkansan artists, bunch of hillbillies with paints…(lol, I’m going to get shot). DITCH HOMEWORK AND WRITE SOME MORE, GIRL! I do like your stories, very much. Especially “Ubiquitous” for some reason, maybe because the title is so original and fun to pronounce. But the characters are fun, too. :)
Vitreous: vit-re-ous… I don’t believe I can pronounce your penname aloud, lol. Yet it’s easy to remember. What’s it mean? I admit I could go find a dictionary myself, but I tend to get distracted by other big words along the way and I’d never make it as far as the V’s. Oh yes, and WELCOME to my little reviewers’ party! So glad you could join us! So you prefer Kiba, hm? He does have his moments. But he’s just so naïve, and, incidentally, he’s about to make Jack’s life hell… His own best friend! And you believe this is well-written? Really? No, I’m not just fishing for compliments: I really want to hear what people think of me switching POV’s like this. I was going to write in 3rd person, but 3rd person is such a hard perspective for me to write for some reason. Just created, like, a mental block each time I tried. So it came out 1st person, but then I couldn’t decide who’s POV to stick with, so it ended up coming from like 3 different people’s points of views, chapter by chapter. (who’s the 3rd? You find out in Chapter 7!!!) Thanks so much for your feedback. You have no idea how encouraging even just a few simple words can be to me. One time I got a review that said only “i like it!”, and it was the only review for the chapter, and yet those three simple words kept me updating. Good thing, too; it was my first story and I only had about 2 reviewers to start off with, but it ended up being among my most successful. I’m guessing since you have an account on FP that you write also? Actually I just checked out your bio so I already know you do, ha. Be sure that I’ll be reading! (I might not review for a couple months, but I’ll be keeping track of the story/plot/characters. I’ll definitely review before summer though! Maybe I can catch up over spring break, April 9-17! Are you still in school?). Again, really, THANK YOU!
RoseTintedSoul: Such a pretty penname! WELCOME to my little reviewers’ party! And I’m so glad you’re enjoying. Thank you for taking the time to send me your comments as well. I really, REALLY appreciate it. So are you still attending school? How was your weekend? (not that you have to answer any of my questions, I just tend to ramble to fill space. Discourages a person from wanting to hear me speak, lol. I just don’t like seeing one of my Review Responses’ as only two sentences long for some reason. I don’t want you thinking I don’t like/appreciate you as much as the others, it’s just that I don’t have much to go on about with you yet). Again, thanks! J
Glittericious: You’d think my computer would have accepted your penname by now, but MicrosoftWord just keeps putting that red-squiggly-underline under it that claims it isn’t in the dictionary, when I know I’ve added it at least 3 times, lol. This story’s addicting, huh? I’m not sure whether that’s good or bad—good for me, but bad for a person’s eyes perhaps? (grins). I’m so glad you’re back! Thanks again for all your support. I really can never thank you enough. Hasn’t it been EVERY story by now? So how’ve you been lately? How was your weekend? Been up to anything exciting/dull/worthwhile? I’ve been up to everything absolutely dull. No, the dullest. So I won’t bother to share. But I’d love to hear how you’ve been, what you’ve been doing. Let’s catch-up. :)
Trmpetplaya1: It took me just about FOREVER to realize your penname was “trumpet-player” without the u or e-r. Yes, I’m just VERY slow. (been living around these Arkansan hillbillies too long, haha… (glances over shoulder at hillbilly classmate that’s giving me a dirty look as if sensing the insult))… WELCOME to my little reviewers’ party! So you’re ALREADY hooked? I really don’t know what it is about this story that’s catching so many people’s attention. Maybe because I’m finally starting to keep track of my characters and their ages? (in all my other stories, my main character would start out 16, and suddenly jump to 18 in the course of 2 weeks by the end of the story… yes, I’m also horrible at math). Thanks for the feedback! It’s really, REALLY inspiring—you have know idea how just a little “update soon” can lift my heart. And by the bye, I WON’T LET THE MAN KEEP ME DOWN! NOT EVER! Haha, yeah… Don’t know where that came from either, but it made me smile. Sympathy is always nice, though it was all my fault in the first place and THE MAN (whom was actually a WOman this time) had every right to expel me, lol. I tend to THROW myself into trouble. Mum strongly believes it’s just a phase, and Father Dear strongly believes it’s nothing that can’t be cured with another dose of military school… (laughs as she shudders). Do you still attend school? Or is playing the trumpet something your parents got you started on individually and you learned to love it? That happened with me and the piano—except the piano and I don’t really get along. I’m convinced it’s out of tune, but my sisters tell me no, I’m just that bad at it. ;)
InspiredSpider: I like your penname. It’s catchy. You have no idea how jealous you made me by mentioning your little sister—as childish as it sounds, and though I’m about 17 years too late, I WANT ONE! Of course, the irony of it is that I’m the baby of my family (which isn’t as much fun as you’d think it would be. These people watch me like HAWKS eyeing a sparrow). And how old is your little sister exactly that she should be able to sit atop your head? … Wow, the funniest picture just popped into my head. Anyway, WELCOME to my little reviewers’ party! Which is growing rapidly—I had no idea this story would be so successful. What is it about it? Really? I keep looking at the number of reviews and think I’m seeing double, that I must be mistaken, and I’m tempted to turn to the hillbilly beside me and ask what number he sees, but then he probably can’t count that high… (glances at the handsome, actually well-educated boy sitting beside her, glaring at her, and smiles nervously). Anyway, LOOK HOW QUICKLY I UPDATED! Just for you, lol. Kiba again, hm? Personally I prefer Jack. While writing this chapter I was just so tempted to crawl into the computer and comfort him, but then Jack is just another of my cliché fictional characters and, realizing this, I’d then be trapped in a computer… Did you know I actually have a friend named Spyder who lives in Manhattan, New York? No, you probably didn’t, but I just thought I’d share that. Anyway, reason I shared this secret knowledge (sorry Spyder, now the FBI knows where you are): Is your name actually Spider or just a clever penname you thought of? (not that you have to answer any of my rambling little questions if they make you uncomfortable and you’re really not the type to share personal info (which I can totally understand)). I guess since I’m asking, I should tell you my name is Nicola so you won’t feel so uncomfortable… or maybe I’m just very bored and lonely right now, lol. Thanks for your comments! I really do appreciate anything you have to say.
CynicalValentine98: Your penname makes me so curious. Is there a story behind it? Does it have anything to do with 1998 or were you just picking out random numbers? But that’s probably a personal memory and I’m not going to ask you to share it. I just like being curious. And no, in my opinion, curiosity did not kill the cat. Vanity did. Curiosity is what brought it back. Oh yes, and WELCOME to my little reviewers’ party! Wow, you’re like the 5th new person I’ve welcomed to it today and this is just the 2nd chapter. I don’t believe that’s ever happened for/to me before. Anyway, I’m so glad you dislike Katrina! I do, too. I hated doing that to Gypsy. (yes, I’m a sucker, too, I admit it). Somehow that cat keeps popping up in any of Elizabeth’s chapters (when its written in her POV), and somehow she keeps playing important little parts. (can you hear that suspenseful music?). For this reason I’m glad Gypsy has a fan (well, at least someone caring about her fictional well-being). And you like Jack, too?! I’m in love with him, which is wrong because I’m kind of like his parent considering I wrote him into existence, but then I’ll be writing him into such horrible situations in chapters to come (more suspenseful music plays) that I can’t help feeling sympathetic toward him. (turns off tape-player playing the theme song to the radio production of CLUE (like the game, but so much more boring (I listened to it in the 6th grade in English class, and it was so awfully boring that, although I’m terribly forgetful, I’ve retained the memory to reflect on in times when I think I’m bored, but then I look back on that day in my 6th grade English class in Wisconsin, and I realize I’m not all that bored)). And no, I actually don’t have lots more important things to do. At the moment I’m ditching a variation of social studies class (I think they call it US Issues around here, but I don’t really pay attention), sitting in front of the computer and listening to Bob Marley on my iPod (which is cracked and cheap, and I bought it for $27 off some guy in New York when I visited there two weeks ago, so it’s probably stolen, but it works). I hope you didn’t die! Especially not for this chapter. And, in closing, THANKS SO MUCH for reviewing! Feel free to ramble some more if you ever so choose to review again. As you can see, I enjoy the sound of my own voice and answering any questions you may have (whether it be about my life, or you want my (terrible) advice on relationships (which I advise you not to ask me about because at the moment I have 3 rather dysfunctional relationships going on, on the side), or this story, (as long as I’m not giving away the EXCITING conclusion to this story)… (which I haven’t finished writing yet)). Wow, this Review Response has gotten long as well. Now I’m sure YOU have many more important things to do. Thus, I bid you adieu for now.
Fortunesfading: I like your penname, too. Somehow it reminds me of this fox-character named Fortunata in a book by Brian Jacques (who writes the Redwall series that I read a couple of in the 9th grade). I forget which book, but your penname brings back the memory. I’m not sure how/why. :) Anyway, also WELCOME to my little reviewers’ party! I’m glad you’re enjoying. Thanks so much for the encouragement. It really does mean a lot to me, you have no idea just how much. My heart literally flutters when I see the little Review Alert’s in my email Inbox. So I’m guessing that you write stories, too? Or are you the type for poetry? I’ll be checking out your material, regardless, of course. Anything you suggest I start with? A favorite you have?
Nacomis: I forgot your grandpa was Native American, although now that you mentioned it I remember you saying something during “Bodyguard”. There’s a lake in Minnesota named Nacomis. It’s right next to The Falls… which Falls, I couldn’t tell you at the moment because I just blanked out on their name. But it’s a really popular lake and when I was living there for 4 months about a year ago I visited it often with my mother because she loved the reflection of a clear night sky off the black water and it was the only lake nearby, so… yeah. Got sidetracked again there. And you don’t have to swear on your life, I believe you. I have no reason to doubt you. You really LOVE Elizabeth? I’m glad you can relate to her—I like creating characters and events that people can relate to. My sister Jesse was my inspiration for Elizabeth—she’s kind of hypie these days, wears all sorts of clothes like floral, flowery, ruffled peasant skirts and the like, and now insists on living off the land in Kauai, Hawaii. When she lived at home she insisted we recycle and wouldn’t let any of us use hair-products or makeup that polluted the ozone or might have been tested on animals. We tended to look like crap in those days, but then none but my sister Alice really cares about her appearance so that was fine with me. We found ways around it, both ozone- and animal-friendly. Anyway, thus Elizabeth Ashton came to be! As for “Life Will Let You…”—Just for you, I’ve decided to update Chapter 8 (or is it Chapter 9 already? It’s been so long…). That’ll be it for a while though, I apologize. But I really wrote myself into a corner with that one. I had plans for “LWLY” to be so successful, but it ended up being a real struggle just to write the chapters by Chapter 3. I don’t even know why. It shouldn’t be that hard to write, but then everything just slowly grinded to a halt and I don’t know… I promise I’ll finish it. I promise I’ll finish ALL of my stories, but especially “Life Will Let You” if just to please you. It’ll just be after “Drama King” and then this story, just because now I’ve got 3 continuing stories going at once and I’m a little overwhelmed, and I’m just going by what’s most successful. If feedback stops flowing for this story, I’ll probably end up switching back and finishing “LWLY” first anyway. I tend to play it by ear. The story that gets the most reviews is the one that finishes first, I guess. Anyway, THANK YOU SO SO SO VERY MUCH for continuing to be so loyal! You always have a kind word to say and you couldn’t know how much I really, REALLY appreciate it, though I’ve said it about a million times and I’ll say it about a million more. And just so you have my opinion, WRITE THAT STORY about the stripper! I don’t read enough stories about strippers, though every time I turn on the radio to any popular pop station that’s all that seems to be playing. Almost makes me want to go out and take off my clothes for perverted old men who might give me dollars for degrading myself like so—Sorry, I’m just criticizing the music. You know that song “I’m In Love With A Stripper” and then “It’s Getting Hot In Here” and then… well, there’s many others. I hate those. The only song about a stripper I even REMOTELY like is that one by the group City High, I think it’s called “What Would You Do”—and I like it because it shows kind of both sides of it. They’re not just singing about some girl taking off her clothes to amuse some perverts because she likes the attention—they’re singing about a real person that has a kid at home and came out of a messed up life and she really believes that stripping is the simplest way to pay the bills on time. And that’s the type of story I can really see myself reading. Hopefully I will be seeing it on here soon, because YOU SHOULD WRITE IT before someone steals your idea because here I am laying out an entire plot for them and posting it on one of the most popular websites for aspiring young writers. And yes, school does suck, but in the words of my army of counselors that are convinced they can save me, “Then suck it up.” (lol, the first time a counselor said that to me, I wasn’t sure whether to feel upset or just laugh, it was just that random/unexpected). Be seeing you! Thanks, again. REALLY, you do keep me writing. (God, I wrote like 2 pages of just Review Responses).
Soulbird’s end-note: I promise never to write Review Responses THIS LONG ever again. I don’t know what’s wrong with me today. I just had a lot to say, I guess.
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